and please dnt name it " piece of shit " lmao


The big black book of mans fear is open till the end of time
Life is a self-written song with melodies and rhythms but no rhyme
In the night every blade of grass or immovable boulder can look at your shame
But in this empty field of judgment no innocent shadow is there to take the blame
All the burdens of man and his dread are flowing from his terror
No sun light drenched creature is ready to take all the blame of this error
The horror at the reflecting pool filled with the blood of the pure is too much guilt to bear
They walk the paths alone without even their own shadow and no one wants to care
Only the honest moonlight can cleanse the aggressive red off the calmness of night
Leaving the beautifully vivid darkness even more pure than it was before the blight

an acolytes teaching

semi serious
but not really [to avoid embarassment, i barley read it, but the parts i read were good]

A KKK's diary

i can almost see why u would say that, but im pretty sure u were just being random, so, leave and keep being a purple pen who annoys the villager's pet lobsters elsewhere u pretty leprechaun

o, and thanks 4 liking the parts u actually read suppose.... ummm... yeah

"piece of shit"

jk, i dunno what it is....

maybe it should be called "???"

brave words for an acolyte...but by judging your user name alone, I take it as your an ass....a "special" ass. I mean,

NAZISM AND ANARCHY DON'T FUCKING MIX YOU ASSHOLE

i like 88 cuz its mi football (american kind) jersey number and i am an anarchist well, by definition, not by what society connects with the label " anarchist ", if that makes any sense and ive been learning/reading off of totse since i was 11, its just recently that i decided to make an account

I don't know if you wanted feedback on this, but it's much too wordy for me. The lines are just too long. I like what you're saying but I didn't make it through. Rhyming couplets always frustrate me as well, but that's just a personal thing. From what I read (about half) it seemed to lack cohesiveness. I don't know, I read half of it and now, barely a minute later I don't even remember what it was about. Darkness, books, shadow, sun drenched is pretty much the impression I got.

i did want feedback, thanks for being the only person smart enough to realize it. i kno it lacks a good flow, but most of mi writing is choppy. and i also kind of have a hard time saying what i feel with a small ammount of words. i wasnt reely going for a point to the poem, it was just the manifestations of a few of mi thoughts.