I think to myself life is ironic as I take a long pull from my Newport, as I look at a past lover from a myspace that I accidentally bumped into too. I say its ironic because she’s from Mexican decent, I despise most Mexicans because at my mother’s business they come in all the time, and they’re retarded beyond comparison. But she was Mexican, the most beautiful women I have ever gazed eyes on who ever seemed tot take a fancy to me. She seemed flawless when I first met her. But then I sooner realized she was just like any other teenage girl growing up in New York. A whore. Just a ghetto whore. Smoked and drank and associated most of her time with low level gang members. But nonetheless I loved her to shreds. But then abruptly without warning she left me. The reason for this is that she merely wanted to be single and live her life. She also said I was too good to be true. Which as you may know and I definitely know its complete and utter bullshit.

Now fast forward a couple of months. I bump into her url. It turns out she no longer has the neeed to be single. That wasn’t what bothered me because I knew she was full of shit to begin with. What really made the blood rush to my head was the fact that…She completely turned her image into the women I always fantasized her as being.. No longer looking like a female gangbanger whore…But a somewhat black and white model which glowed with beauty and elegance.. But the admiration in my eyes quickly faded as I saw the culprit to this transformation. It was a male with bangs on his head. He was..A fucking emo. I take another pull of my Newport and completely consume the cigarette to its filter, and blow the smoke onto the screen that holds the photos that I once held close to my heart. I go to the corner of the screen and hit the X button erasing the page along with the her image.

Just felt like sharing that.



Edit: I wasnt going to post her picture.I wanted to keep some kind of intimancy between me and her even through photos. She means nothing to me any longer and what better way to display this than in totse. Even though she is mexican in decent,she really is quite gorgeous,the pictures dont do her justice. But, shes just another scar in my heart.

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And the emo shes with now. I know i may sound ''emo'' in this thread. But in reality im far from it. I dont sit,cry,and cut myself because of heartache, i simply embrace it and move on.

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[This message has been edited by Lobo (edited 02-03-2007).]

You, sir, seem to be the emo one.

Possibly. I dont have the look though. Or like emo music.

Fuck "emo", he's a good writer and is sharing his god damn emotions. Jesus christ.

Thanks rizzo. I was just overcome with emotions and had to share.

My sympathies.

I read the thread about a dirty beaner lover while absent mindedly stroking my crotch. After writing what is no doubt a witty reply, I hit subtmit, and continue browsing the rest of the forum.

I know a girl like that.

Post a picture of this whore.

I love how your write man, sorry about the girl.

quote:Now fast forward a couple of months. I bump into her url.

sorry man, lmao.

I added pics of her and her not so significant to me other half. For those who are returning to the thread who had previously replied.

Maybe I shouldn't bring writing criticism to an S&A thread, but this is an unusual case.

All I'm gonna say is that if you're going to the effort of writing in an affected pulp/noir style, you should probably put in the effort to spell things right and use the correct words to complet phrases. That would make it a lot easier to read.

The way I look at it, the further you go with your writing style, the more exacting you have to be about getting the basic rules right.

Fixed links.

http://tinyurl.com/2fupqe http://tinyurl.com/2y9h3g http://tinyurl.com/2bxfpr

Man, she ugly. I don't care what you look like, you can do better. How you described her (A smoking Mexican girl who hangs out with low level gangs) I was thinking she'd be DAAAAAMN fine for you to put up with that shit. But no.

quote:Originally posted by 256:

All I'm gonna say is that if you're going to the effort of writing in an affected pulp/noir style, you should probably put in the effort to spell things right and use the correct words to complet phrases.

QFT.

If you don't have a proper grasp of basic grammar, creative writing should be postponed until you do.

quote:Originally posted by 256:



All I'm gonna say is that if you're going to the effort of writing in an affected pulp/noir style, you should probably put in the effort to spell things right and use the correct words to complet phrases. That would make it a lot easier to read.



self pwn

quote:Originally posted by Rizzo in a box:

self pwn

They weren't trying to write some faggy narrative you dumb bitch.

quote:Originally posted by arquin:

Man, she ugly. I don't care what you look like, you can do better. How you described her (A smoking Mexican girl who hangs out with low level gangs) I was thinking she'd be DAAAAAMN fine for you to put up with that shit. But no.

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To each his own I soppouse.

she is hidiously ugly, she looks like a man

quote:Originally posted by SlapinFoFun:

They weren't trying to write some faggy narrative you dumb bitch.

You're right, they were criticizing one for spelling/grammar mistakes.

Oh memories. How they pain you, no? I know I'm always torn up by my memories... nothing else can get that deep inside of you, and nothing else is so sharp and rending once it gets that deep. I haven't learened how to remedy that, so I got no advice for you... But yeah I feel your pain.