The queen of my desire

The muse of my affection

Finally within my reach

To caress

To caress

And to adore

But once I held her in my arms

All I could do was look on in awe

Of sheer beauty

Of graceful poise

And so my appreciation

Went unaired and unnoticed

Until I obliviously

Let my grip loosen

And let her slip away

So now I'm back where I began

Letting this emphatic admiration

Burn a hole in my heart

And I told myself

I wouldn't get stuck

But look at me now

I'm stuck with a hole in my chest,

A piece missing

And these thoughts of you

But I'm the willing victim of attraction

Because beauty is in the eye of the beholder

And for you these eyes just won't shut.

Would it be a wise idea to give this to the girl that broke up with me like 2 weeks or so ago? I normally don't get attatched like these but I can't stop thinkin of her.

And the title, cheesey or sweet?

Haha

what's the point?

fuck it man

I dont know what kind of girl she is, or what kind of guy you are. But it could be taken as rather lame. Why not just tell her how you feel?

I don't like the words "sheer beauty"

Are you really stupid enough to want to waste your time posting that?

(@rizzo)

Maybe "undenyable beauty?"



[This message has been edited by baliente (edited 01-13-2007).]

Lame. Your girlfriend would have to be pretty dumb to take you back because a shitty poem.

I don't really care whether she does or not, I don't expect her to. It's more just to get it off my chest.

You dickhead.

i think it's probably better just to get it off your chest here and not show her. just keep moving on unless there's really a reason you would get back together.

Poems can be cute, but they're usually lame. Especially if you guys aren't even going out anymore.

*kiss* that was sweet, but weird itd for an ex, i agree with firekitty on this one.

yeah, i'd love to give it to her, but when i consider everything about our situation, its a really iffy situation.

quote:Originally posted by baliente:

Would it be a wise idea to give this to the girl that broke up with me like 2 weeks or so ago? I normally don't get attatched like these but I can't stop thinkin of her.

And the title, cheesey or sweet?

Don't give it to her.



Queen of desire,

muse of my affection,

here finally within reach

to caress and to

adore. I held

her in my arms, silenced

by beauty.

Flighty bitch, she slipped

away, and took a piece

of my understanding.

I ache while she

laughs and gets fucked

by niggers. My eyes remain

watching, and wait

to recover their queen

after she receives HIV

like gadzooks did

from the crackwhore.

I'm so emo I'll take her

back, no matter

how much it crushes me.

That sucks , it doesnt even rhyme

but it was funny

quote:Originally posted by Rattrap51:

That sucks , it doesnt even rhyme

Most contemporary poetry doesn't rhyme.

I'd just be pissed off because I wasn't even good enough for your best piece of work.

Send her a envelope containing a white powder through the post...