20 Minutes later, I'm feelin blue

20 Minutes later, I'm missin you

Ink on my paper, I'm feelin blue

Think about the good & the bad we been thru

I said I'm your dude, I'll stick wit you

Beleive it's true, I'll follow you

But I broke the rule, I'm such a fool

I'm havin bad dreams, and they're all of you

Not bein in my life, like I want you to

GO down to the beach where the waters blue

I'm drowinin in the deep, and your brown eyes too

I dont know what yo write, mayne, I don't know what to do

I'm beggin in the rain, In a brand new suit

Don't want my heart, cause its just for you

Can we have a talk for just a minute or two?

I belong to you, I was such a fool

How could I beleive you were not for me?

Not for me, I'm under lock & key

I'm fiendin for the day I can stop an cheese

Its like without you baby girl, I can barely breath



mayyyyne, that boy go off huh?

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If I were you, I'd quit with the self-pity and remorse thing, suck it up, hold your head up high, say "fuck it" and move on. Like I said in your other thread, the way out is through. Don't let all the "will she take me back?" thoughts fuck with you. If you two are meant to be, you will be, no matter what, even though you ended it.

I'm not trying to insult you, either. I'm just giving some advice.

nah it aint like that. We on a break.

but i got them lyrics huh? ^^^^

[This message has been edited by Psychotogen (edited 03-30-2004).]

The lyrical structure is very elemntary, my man.

It's like a nursery rhyme or something!

I'm on a break from the girl I love too...But damn man, writing a song ain't gonna bring 'em back!

Especially one that goes like yours!

quote:Originally posted by psycho_8b:

The lyrical structure is very elemntary, my man.

It's like a nursery rhyme or something!

I'm on a break from the girl I love too...But damn man, writing a song ain't gonna bring 'em back!

Especially one that goes like yours!

plz hahaha it is called a "creative outlet". It's a way for me to deal with my stress. Let's see what you got???

Go some where else and do it then.

~30-06~

quote:Originally posted by Psychotogen:

plz hahaha it is called a "creative outlet". It's a way for me to deal with my stress. Let's see what you got???

Dude, you're weird...

Seriously, I mean usually weird is a good thing but you just scream "attention whore!"

As psycho__8b told you, the lyrics are rather elementary. There are a couple lines that sound like they were just trying to rhyme the previous line. I am not saying I could do better. I doubt I could even write a couple lines...Guitar and baking are more my creative outlets.

But the thought behind the song is really quite quaint. I like it. A lot of lines are so romantically.

I comend you for having a creative outlet. A lot of people dont realize to do this, and they dwell. It's so great to see people who let out their problems through arts.

quote:Originally posted by aloneandbroken:

As psycho__8b told you, the lyrics are rather elementary. There are a couple lines that sound like they were just trying to rhyme the previous line. I am not saying I could do better. I doubt I could even write a couple lines...Guitar and baking are more my creative outlets.

But the thought behind the song is really quite quaint. I like it. A lot of lines are so romantically.

I comend you for having a creative outlet. A lot of people dont realize to do this, and they dwell. It's so great to see people who let out their problems through arts.



Thank you. And btw it does belong here becuase it has to do with S&A. And I never claimed to be a professional lyricist. infact this is like the 5th song ive written maybe 6th since like 4 years ago so BLAH1!!! ::sticks out tounge:;



EDIT: THIS is the only line that i jsut tried to rhyme "I'm beggin in the rain, In a brand new suit", everything else is true.



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