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| Eat your words This forum, formerly known as Vogon poetry, has now been expanded to include all forums of literary creative expression. Please post ONLY your own work and try not to flame other users. Bad vogonesque poetry, is of course, still welcome here. |
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#1
 2002-05-12, 14:16
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Hells Hero 
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A poem explaining my current life, it post on the site but i did come up yet
Why does it have hurt so bad? Why does she make me feel so sad?
Why can�t things be the ever same What happened to us was a shame All of my life where she had been? I wish I just could hold her again
Why does it have hurt so bad? Why does she make me feel so sad?
I fell for her, but I hit the ground I can�t stand to see her walking down the halls For my heart is does pound And I can�t go back to just friends For then the memorizes will never fade and the hurt never end
Why does it have hurt so bad? Why does she make me feel so sad? Was it reallfy just a stupid fad?
I know it�s not her fault And I need to some mature adult It was just going to happen anyway Is what they say But the doesn�t change the way I fell
I know it was for the best Fuck the best, I�m still a mess And I must confess I put my life to the test
Why does it have hurt so bad?
please tell me what you think, if you kids wanna hear the story behind it post and i'll respond
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#2
 2002-06-17, 00:50
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Re: A poem explaining my current life, it post on the site but i did come up yet
not bad, but sometimes rhyme scheme can kill a poem.
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#3
 2002-07-05, 08:58
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Dr Know 
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Re: A poem explaining my current life, it post on the site but i did come up yet
hey bar room hero i havent seen you here at totse for a long time
yeah nice poem
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#4
 2002-07-22, 07:15
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jak719usa 
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Re: A poem explaining my current life, it post on the site but i did come up yet
It was good. But you got off your rhyming pattern. which didn't make it sound right.
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