Where have I gone?
This is what I made of myself.
I can't change that now.
I'm a lost soul.
I'm falling apart.
I'm barely hanging on.
With a broken heart.

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mi friend wrote it after some shit happened to her. comment please. and if at all possible for you, be nice (well, nice for totseans)

The strings will muse as I amuse the ruse I'm gently setting down. This cock is flaming with a painting morphing my destructive bounds. Hounding showers fill my hours like dogs at shelters with no legs. Obtuse sequestered teethed moaning will astound your deadly heads. Scraping shakes of rock-lined concrete, your face is now pretty-stained. Write a little more of dogging, shotguns will let fly my reign.

She gets her point across.
Thats a good thing, I suppose
Or you could write her a possitive piece to give her a little bit of her self esteem back.
yah?
Keep an eye on her and don't let her near any sharp objects.

reads like every other bit of emo-ish high school poetry i have seen. which is not necessarily a bad thing, there is something to be said for the emotions she is expressing. plus i really like how short it is. gets to the point, no thrills just the angst of losing your highschool sweet heart, something we can all identify with.

Or maybe she's just a fat sack who dropped her twinky in the mud? haha

Just maybe

Or maybe she's just a fat sack who dropped her twinky in the mud? haha

Just maybe

lol nah, shes a pretty girl. she just has a bad habit of hooking up with dudes from the wrong crowd

lol nah, shes a pretty girl. she just has a bad habit of hooking up with dudes from the wrong crowd
orly? I'm seeing no one at the moment.

orly? I'm seeing no one at the moment.

where do u live and how old are you? shes 14. u prolly feel like a serious pedo now :P

where do u live and how old are you? shes 14. u prolly feel like a serious pedo now :P
:(14?
Others would be more keen on her than this totsean.
Bump for them :D

:(14?
Others would be more keen on her than this totsean.
Bump for them :D

lol its ok, shes been known to date, like, 16 yr olds

Qq
lol

Qq
lol

huh??