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| Printed Matter Books, Magazines, and Newpapers. What you read and why you read it. Favorite authors, magazines you read, recommendations for future reading, unusual books and where to purchase them, and sources of strange mail. |
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#1
 2008-10-22, 22:49 |
random_internet_person 
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 Emo
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#2
2008-10-22, 23:01 |
Exothermia
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Re: Emo
Wrong forum.
As for the poetry, it reads like livejournal. I didn't connect with it at all. Certainly part of poetry is describing your emotion and she did a fine enough job of that but the other part of poetry is connecting with your audience so that they experience the same emotion through your words. I didn't really get that from either piece.
I'd tell her she certainly has a fine command of language and literary devices, but she should try to express her feelings in a manner more people can connect with. I'm certainly no expert but if it were my poem that's what I would think after reading it.
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2008-10-23, 02:08 |
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Re: Emo
Wow, that's not overly-sentimental at all  ! |
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2008-10-23, 02:20 |
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Re: Emo
? Poetry on Totse
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2008-10-23, 17:19 |
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Behind you. With a lead pipe.
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Re: Emo
They need to be deveolped. Otherwise they read like basic schoolfare.
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